tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post8421304284660505786..comments2023-08-02T05:06:28.437-04:00Comments on Having Writ: Over the Horizonsister AEhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17253107622268200803noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-58423369560823188842008-01-10T22:32:00.000-05:002008-01-10T22:32:00.000-05:00Hi, Richard. Thanks for the ideas. I think the "...Hi, Richard. Thanks for the ideas. I think the "proving" is currently without a match later on explaining - something.<BR/><BR/>I'm intrigued by the idea of swapping those lines in the 4th stanza. I'll definitely try that out when I pull this out to work on it again.sister AEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17253107622268200803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-89409950418531537442008-01-10T20:07:00.000-05:002008-01-10T20:07:00.000-05:00Very nicely done. If I may: really liked the fir...Very nicely done. If I may: really liked the first and fourth stanzas. Second stanza made me wonder what trees have to prove, if anything. 3d stanza cemented the feeling of space and expanse. And the fourth, what would you think about transposing the 1st and 2nd lines?<BR/><BR/>Sounds like the great Mid-West to me.<BR/><BR/>Thanks.<BR/><BR/>As blogger won't let me i.d. myself in my current incartantion, here I am:<BR/><A HREF="http://web.mac.com/rwellsrwells/iWeb/Site/Resident%20Djinn/Resident%20Djinn.html" REL="nofollow">Richard</A>Richard Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17189198787248084987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-41859019298124710582008-01-09T15:10:00.000-05:002008-01-09T15:10:00.000-05:00Thanks, Jen. It may be the same globe, but it cer...Thanks, Jen. It may be the same globe, but it certainly is a different world.sister AEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17253107622268200803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-89148951553756760752008-01-09T07:52:00.000-05:002008-01-09T07:52:00.000-05:00thanks, Chris.thanks, Chris.sister AEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17253107622268200803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-84764992049900547162008-01-08T23:00:00.000-05:002008-01-08T23:00:00.000-05:00Very beautiful poem!Very beautiful poem!Chrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12233155634614818489noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-71806559874688173742008-01-08T16:04:00.000-05:002008-01-08T16:04:00.000-05:00Hello, LittleWing. We had snow in December, then ...Hello, LittleWing. We had snow in December, then bitter cold last week. Today we seem to be having spring here in New England.sister AEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17253107622268200803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-82539116589950372362008-01-08T15:48:00.000-05:002008-01-08T15:48:00.000-05:00that is a beauty...here we are enveloped in a whit...that is a beauty...here we are enveloped in a white mist of falling snow blowing in every direction...little wing writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16010376737431344381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-78880237494048060422008-01-08T15:16:00.000-05:002008-01-08T15:16:00.000-05:00Hello, Preethi. I was a "townie" but in a very sm...Hello, Preethi. I was a "townie" but in a very small town in the middle of lots and lots of farmland.<BR/><BR/>Hi, tumblewords. I'm glad you like it.<BR/><BR/>Welcome, Penelope Anne. I think I have a bit of ambivalence as to how to end the piece and that may have come through. I'll likely leave it for a while and revisit it in a few months to see if a better end has revealed itself to me.sister AEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17253107622268200803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-4349019091144107012008-01-08T13:06:00.000-05:002008-01-08T13:06:00.000-05:00Stanza two really evoked some memories for me, and...Stanza two really evoked some memories for me, and the final stanza....strong but I think you need just a little more....seems maybe unfinished, but could and most likely is just me. <BR/><BR/>MY first ever entry:<BR/>http://wannabeawritersomeday.blogspot.com/2008/01/over-horizon-writers-island-edition-1.htmlAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11518964123008830311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-74096851116697390772008-01-08T13:05:00.000-05:002008-01-08T13:05:00.000-05:00This is probably my favorite of your wonderful poe...This is probably my favorite of your wonderful poetry. From the left coast, weather sweeps over my spot in about twenty-seven hours. I like the expansive feel of words here.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-20846478111727449962008-01-08T12:58:00.000-05:002008-01-08T12:58:00.000-05:00Oh this sounds so wonderful.. brought to mind so m...Oh this sounds so wonderful.. brought to mind so many road trips.. I have always wanted to live in the country... and this brought back the pangs!! <BR/><A HREF="http://poetictrails.blogspot.com/2008/01/over-horizon.html" REL="nofollow"> Over the Horizon </A>Preethihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10943344283863649487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-31391781462227725362008-01-08T10:55:00.000-05:002008-01-08T10:55:00.000-05:00Thanks, Gautami.Hello, Robin. Thanks.Hi, watermai...Thanks, Gautami.<BR/><BR/>Hello, Robin. Thanks.<BR/><BR/>Hi, watermaid. Its true, there are a lot of different kinds of spaces within the US. I grew up in the great flatness in the middle, but now I live 15 miles from the ocean, although I rarely go look at it (which is a shame).sister AEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17253107622268200803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-67904497667041752572008-01-08T07:25:00.000-05:002008-01-08T07:25:00.000-05:00You have so much space in your country. I've never...You have so much space in your country. I've never been to the States and it's hard to appreciate the vastness. Here in little old England you are never far from the sea. I loved the last stanza too. I'm drawn to curves and circles.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-63463724389088516732008-01-08T01:59:00.000-05:002008-01-08T01:59:00.000-05:00the space between me and the horizonI like the way...the space between me and the horizon<BR/><BR/>I like the way you've drawn the far-away in, and expanded the reach of the close.Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02409530202277375625noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-22793574.post-44059839462102074892008-01-08T00:57:00.000-05:002008-01-08T00:57:00.000-05:00that last stanza is very good. thanksthat last stanza is very good. thanksgautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.com