Sunday, February 17, 2008

American Sentences from San Francisco

[Brought to you from my almost-over vacation in San Francisco, here are a couple of American sentences.]


I sit and smile in my shirtshleeves as the locals pass by in parkas.


Grey men in dark blue watch from dim corners with slim hopes and cardboard signs.



12 comments:

writerwoman said...

Great job on both of them. They are like written photos of your trip.

sister AE said...

Thanks, Sara. I think of them like that too!

Crafty Green Poet said...

yes, these are perfect snapshots

Brian said...

Both set a scene and emotions. I really like the second one.

paisley said...

very insightful.. i live in marin county,, and yes,,, we are a bunch of freeze babies!!!!!

Jo said...

That second one is superb, really superb.

SweetTalkingGuy said...

A postcard from 'Frisco, perhaps..

sister AE said...

Thanks, everyone! I'm glad you like them.

Paisley - even I was wearing gloves at night on the weekend! But not a hat.

Jo - the phrase "grey men in dark blue" came to me while we were walking one day and I couldn't wait to write it down so I wouldn't lose it.

gautami tripathy said...

Both very vivid, Very good.

submerge

sister AE said...

Thanks, Gautami. I'll be by to read yours later today.

anthonynorth said...

Almost surreal. Interesting.

sister AE said...

hello, anthony. thanks (although they are most definitely true-to-life in this case).