Wednesday, October 10, 2007

A Tanka Plus Two More

[inspired by Bone and his 3 Word Wednesday prompt - this week the words were initial, knock, weather. These words led me to try a tanka for the first time. But the form of the tanka led me to something that was not quite right, so I wrote a second poem, still using the exact form of the given words. Finally, I wrote a 3rd version changing the words to fit the exact feeling I wanted. - Enjoy!]

This is my first tanka

yesterday's weather
a warm summery pleasure
a tree announces
with a knock on the window
initial blast of winter

Poem #2

The tree's knock on the window

scratches an initial in the frost --

a winter weather calling card.

Poem #3

The tree knocks on the window

scratching an initial in the frost --

a winter calling card.


Clare said...

I totally love how you showed us your process as one poem led to the next -- this is fantastic. Your tanka is beautiful -- I love the blend of seasons with summer and winter. And your poems 2 and 3 are really lovely, and it's amazing how subtle changes create a whole new poem.

Jo said...

What Clare said ((GRIN)). My favourite is number two. Lovely.

sister AE said...

Hi, Clare and Jo. Thanks, both. I don't often "show my work" but it just seemed right this time.

Bone said...

I really like the winter's calling card idea.

Welcome to 3 Word Wednesday! Hope you'll return.

sister AE said...

Hi, Bone,
thanks. I'm hope so too.

Truefaith1963 said...

Those are all really good!

sister AE said...

Thanks, Truefaith, I'm glad you like them.

TC said...

These were fun.

P.S. Welcome to 3WW! I would have been by before, but couldn't get mine written this week and I don't read other's until mine's done :)

sister AE said...

Hi, TC, and thanks. I do the same thing. I don't want to be swayed by someone else's take.